Wow, a great story! I love it how you include so many different ideas, which all fit and expand the TF:Animater universe, in just a thousand words.
I enjoyed both the chacterization of Magnus, who is the very Magnus of this universe, as well as of Elita - she fits to this world, and yet as newsy891 said above there are still hints to the old rekationship between Optimus and Elita (the few things we know from the canon about them...). And you give an excellent, believable reason for the problems Optimus has later.
Somehow I really hope, that "end" does not mean that you will not return to this worls and those ideas. I think there is more that can be told :)
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I enjoyed both the chacterization of Magnus, who is the very Magnus of this universe, as well as of Elita - she fits to this world, and yet as newsy891 said above there are still hints to the old rekationship between Optimus and Elita (the few things we know from the canon about them...). And you give an excellent, believable reason for the problems Optimus has later.
Somehow I really hope, that "end" does not mean that you will not return to this worls and those ideas. I think there is more that can be told :)