Very very nice. I loved all the little scene details and the amusing little cameos you slipped in there. And the beginning made me feel sorry for poor Breakdown and his spoiled vacation... It's nice to see him get what he wanted.

Spindledrop was fun! And rather perceptive, too! Of course, any shrewd businessmech would have to be shrewd to survive amidst all the rest of the glitter and flash and opportunities that make the city hum. Not to mention having to be smart to make it as a Neutral in modern times.

I like it. Very nicely done. Thank you.