The only off-spot that I could see was the Twins dialogue: they seem to speak in first person plural (the "We" form, as it were). Other than that little nit-picky bit, this is excellent stuff!

Re: the Sunglasses ::Grins:: Ooh, the Twins removed the lenses?? Naughty Twins!

And Ref refusing to go to the Merv is in character for her: she's uncomfortable with the idea, though of course... she certainly *doesn't* object to his going in to her rooms by night...

Makes me wanna play out what led up to this... *eeeevil grin!*